We have some work to do here to tidy this up. Firstly I would suggest making sure that the text does not go onto your model. Go back to your research and plans and see what else you think could be done to improve this.
This is a mixed blog overall Megan. It starts really well with good research which just needs some tidying up but then as you move to production there are problems. The photography is not strong enough (live shots) and there is not a contact sheet or an idea of the decision making process (live and studio shots). It seems half way through you decided to change from rock to pop which has confused things a little. You need to stick with one. We also need to work on your final pages which do not match the standard of your early research. Second drafts are improving your work but at the minute there is a lot to do. You also need to get your college magazine on here. There is still a lot of potential here but it will take some more thought and work to get it up to the higher end grades.
We have some work to do here to tidy this up. Firstly I would suggest making sure that the text does not go onto your model.
ReplyDeleteGo back to your research and plans and see what else you think could be done to improve this.
This is a mixed blog overall Megan. It starts really well with good research which just needs some tidying up but then as you move to production there are problems. The photography is not strong enough (live shots) and there is not a contact sheet or an idea of the decision making process (live and studio shots).
ReplyDeleteIt seems half way through you decided to change from rock to pop which has confused things a little. You need to stick with one. We also need to work on your final pages which do not match the standard of your early research. Second drafts are improving your work but at the minute there is a lot to do. You also need to get your college magazine on here.
There is still a lot of potential here but it will take some more thought and work to get it up to the higher end grades.